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to you
by jsenn

I am
centered

at the bottom of the ocean
washed by sea and sand and time
a servant of the elements
rust worn by the motion of life.
Was there ever another way
to live this song we sing?
We land where we fall
we grow where we're planted
we cherish, we love, we grab the brass ring.

Joy Senn
2/2002
©2002-2009 °jsenn
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. sometimes encouragment . sometimes tears . always life .

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`deejbard May 2, 2002, 8:20:05 AM
hee hee ... did you ever read that heinlein book? this sounds like something he would have written ... more poetic, but philosophically the same.

good stuff.

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You must stay drunk on writing so reality cannot destroy you.

Ray Bradbury
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~hedda May 2, 2002, 8:25:07 AM
I like the serenity of it...... :) (Smile)

and the flow.... "a servant of the elements" is a fantastic line
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~umbilikal May 2, 2002, 8:52:17 AM
somehow i wonder if we can ever question hope.....i think you answered with a resounding NO!!
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~miss-conception May 2, 2002, 9:41:00 AM
brass ring! cool stuff to hang on to :P (Razz)

if sea=art, sand=words, you are centred very gracefully my dear topaz sister. while i'm thinking my thoughts i watch you turn the splinters (rust) into shimmering light. that's why the ocean glitters, day or night.~ Love
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~vimana May 2, 2002, 10:18:36 AM
another great poem by you make me think.
what i can say great words deep as always
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`MattSpire May 2, 2002, 1:22:24 PM
I was going to post a line and comment on how much I liked it.. but then I realized I could not discriminate from one line to the next..

Then I was going to leave a thoughtful comment on the entirety of the poem, its essence and purpose, its beauty..

And that leaves me here. Speechless.

(You always do this ;) (Wink) )
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*manadrake May 2, 2002, 2:07:20 PM
well done.....I was going to leave a long comment, but those two words seemed to sum it up aptly.
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~kodama May 2, 2002, 4:08:06 PM
Maybe I misinterpret but it seems to be about humankind's almost futile existence on the earth, in a much larger sea, the universe.

Very nice =) (Smile)
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`dreamz13 May 2, 2002, 6:20:20 PM
Sounds rather sad and resigned, as if there's not much we can change about our life, other than to just do the best with what we've got. Lovely nonetheless.
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Some days you are the bug, some days you are the windshield.
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