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Origami Heart by °jsenn:iconjsenn:

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Origami Heart
by jsenn

origami heart
exquisite velvet pockets
secrets fold inside

Joy Senn
4/27/2002
©2002-2009 °jsenn
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My mother folds origami all the time. Our homes are filled with delicate boxes and birds, butterflies and picture frames. On Valentine's Day, she folded several different origami hearts. One opened into a card, another had pockets on each sided in which to tuck other hearts or notes or wildflowers. This heart is always wanting me to write about it. Last night it decided to be an Origami Heart Haiku.

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~chaosboy Apr 27, 2002, 11:14:21 AM
Im usually not too big on haiku's, but I love this, Wonderful choice of words, even if its only 7. Great work :) (Smile)
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~kodama Apr 27, 2002, 11:26:34 AM
Mmm.. it has a nice "whole" feeling to it. Lovely =) (Smile)
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~dor Apr 27, 2002, 11:43:17 AM
I dunno Joy, me thinks you will be the one to make me finally like Haiku's when I toldya they are short teases! but you always seem to say so much in 3 little lines
(I like that "secrets fold inside") still a secret to me how that fold that origami stuff! hehe
=) (Smile)
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~geobyte Apr 27, 2002, 2:07:17 PM
Wow, who woulda thought to write about that?

"
secrets fold inside
"
Yes, that is the best line, perfect for the ending.
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`dreamz13 Apr 27, 2002, 4:48:20 PM
Interesting...and sweet.
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~mastermindg Apr 27, 2002, 5:39:53 PM
i always like haikus. somehow, their short and meaningful lines communicate more than longer poems can sometimes. i think they make you search for the implied meanings, and they leave so much room for interpretation...love em.
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~castaway Apr 27, 2002, 6:58:51 PM
this is my first experience with haiku - I didn't even know what it meant until a minute ago when I looked it up...it's an interesting style and I don't think that I could keep myself to such a strict and succinct style...so congratulations for being able to do that alone. But not bad...I can't say that it's my favorite ever...but I hope you don't take that as some sort of insult. It's just, well, really really short...but it paints the picture that you wanted to quite well
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~-tank Apr 27, 2002, 7:00:22 PM
awesome haiku...although it was short...i could still see the heart in my head...great work
-tank

-=don't fear to imagine=-
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